Ruiha's descriptive piece of writing

WALT: write a descriptive piece of writing

Cold

Words barely escape my mouth. with hands and feet freezing to death as my nose drips like a waterfall. Fearless and cold I get up, trying as hard as I can to move. Collapsing like a bird that just got shot, my mouth opens and words come out

“ I'm sorry, “ I said to myself. And with that, I took my last breath…

Or so I thought.

In silence, I shake awake from my sleep. Scaredly I walk to the balcony and whisper in a soft voice “why me” I say with tears in my eyes.” why do I have to do this”as tears roll down my face. When The breeze of the night flashes me back to real life and pushes me to go inside, I slipped into the kitchen, grabbing a knife. cutting myself meaningfully. Several shots of pain shoot through my body all at once and force me to stop. Crying and shivering I fall to the ground, while blood drips slowly down my arms, causing me to pass out.

Scared

While I stand at the edge of the building ready to jump, My eyes close The air pushes against me, I’m falling further and further, The adrenaline gets worse. It feels like my body is failing. it feels as if I'm causing thousands and thousands of problems, and now I’m going to fix all of them. Salty tears fill my eyes and spread across my face. My body goes pale and my eyes meet the face of the earth . . .

Wish

My eyes close and the soul inside me collapsed. Ferociously falling to the ground a tear drips violently down my face and ends at my chin, my mind hoping the world will be a better place when I’m gone, hoping all the problems will go away. But hope is something I don’t have. Aggressively I pull the trigger. BANG!! blood falls and spreads across my cheeks and down my head. the brain inside me fails to keep awake... 

Help
My body dangles off the side of the cliff as I scream louder than ever. My arms can't take any more. I slip off the edge and tears spread across my face, hitting the ground below me. Cuts and bruises cover my body and blood pour out of my arms. Tears spread across my face. Thousands of bones crack as I screamed for help.

What I found difficult about this piece of writing was the ideas for each story and how it was all put together, I found it easy to put loads of detail into all of the pieces. I really enjoyed how descriptive and detailed the pieces were.
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